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The story took place at shopping centre called Oriental plaza in Johannesburg.
Main character
Mrs. Nebo, a wife of an important official of the African Front. She was of a medium height, with heavy loins and a smooth skin complexion. She was also rich.
Plot
Mrs. Nebo and a friend Margret were driven in a Mercedes Benz by two escorts to Oriental plaza for shopping. They bought some shoes, jewelleries and dresses. Mrs. Nebo asked the shop assistant if they have silk scarf, she than saw a dress that she wanted and asked for the price. She didn't have enough money to buy the dress. He decided to pay with a cheque but the chestnut didn't accept it because of the rule that they don't allow cheques. Mrs. Nebo felt offended. Margret tried to tell Mr. Sader about Mrs. Nebo’s status and they had a dispute.
Some shopkeepers came in to see what is going on, when they had the noise. Margret told them that Mrs. Nebo is a wife of a future foreign minister of the country and they live in Haughton. Mr. Sakur paid the scarf to end the dispute.
Main character
Mrs. Nebo, a wife of an important official of the African Front. She was of a medium height, with heavy loins and a smooth skin complexion. She was also rich.
Plot
Mrs. Nebo and a friend Margret were driven in a Mercedes Benz by two escorts to Oriental plaza for shopping. They bought some shoes, jewelleries and dresses. Mrs. Nebo asked the shop assistant if they have silk scarf, she than saw a dress that she wanted and asked for the price. She didn't have enough money to buy the dress. He decided to pay with a cheque but the chestnut didn't accept it because of the rule that they don't allow cheques. Mrs. Nebo felt offended. Margret tried to tell Mr. Sader about Mrs. Nebo’s status and they had a dispute.
Some shopkeepers came in to see what is going on, when they had the noise. Margret told them that Mrs. Nebo is a wife of a future foreign minister of the country and they live in Haughton. Mr. Sakur paid the scarf to end the dispute.
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